Interdisciplinary Studies Major, Writing/Marine Bio Minors

Author: Alex (Page 3 of 21)

ENG216 QCQ#9

Quotation: “Undoubtedly, my Lord; and we have no objection to the document being exhibited for the court to draw its own conclusion from, but we deny that it is entitled to speak in its own explanation. A document is a thing which speaks by its written characters. It cannot take to itself a tongue, and speak by word of mouth also; and, in support of this, I may call your Lordship’s attention to the general principles of law governing the interpretation of written documents.”

“I maintain that the document remains the document; and that for all
purposes, including the giving of evidence concerning its execution, Miss
Smithers still remains Miss Smithers.” -Chapter 20

Comment: These two quotes during the trial made me think of our discussion last week about Augusta’s objectification. The first quote, taken from the Attorney-General, describes how Augusta should not be considered a witness because she is already serving as a “document”. This sentiment is something that has been built up throughout the novel from multiple characters such as Eustace and Mr. Short. The first quote could also be a form of satire from Haggard, based upon the traditional phrase that “women (and children) should be seen and not heard”. Haggard is also making a point on how the law is interpreted, most often very literally. Augusta’s purpose, in the eyes of the attorney-general, is to be a document with no voice, despite the fact that she is very clearly a human. Mr. Short’s quote finally seems to defend the humanity of Augusta. He doesn’t say that she is a book (like Eustace) and does not continue to claim that she is solely a document. These points of objectification earlier in the novel were seen as something beneficial for the characters at Augusta’s expense. However, now Mr. Short is attempted to restore her humanity and reconcile for her objectification, which allows Augusta to ultimately give her story to the court, which assists in winning the case.

Question: While Haggard includes a lot of satire within Mr. Meeson’s Will, I can’t help but wonder what the inspiration for the plot was. Was there a case that he believed was taken too literally before the time in which he wrote the novel?

LIL420 Project Revision Plan

*PLEASE SEE UPDATED REVISION PLAN BELOW*

I have decided to focus on revising my novella draft that I created during my independent study with Jesse Miller during the Fall 2022 semester. This course and the creation of the novella focused on biweekly meetings and feedback while also analyzing and studying craft methods within the Neil Gaiman novella, The Ocean at the End of the Lane. At the end of the semester, my project was around 34 single-spaced pages with 22,634 words.

My plan for revision will focus primarily on writing 2-3 chapters over a weekly basis, with the goal of having around 10-11 chapters and *hopefully* around 22,000 words. During the writing process, I will be reading What Moves the Dead by T. Kingfisher and studying craft elements that are used.

Schedule:

  • 3/13-3/17: Write chapters 1-2, Read Kingfisher p.1-30
  • 3/20-3/24: Write chapters 3-5, Read Kingfisher p.31-60
  • 3/27-3/31: Write chapters 6-7, Read Kingfisher p.61-90
  • 4/3-4/7: Write chapters 8-9, Read Kingfisher p.91-120
  • 4/10-4/14: Write chapters 10-11, Read Kingfisher p.121-150
  • 4/17-4/19: Finish writing/review chapters, Read Kingfisher 151-END
  • 4/20-4/28: Review Peer feedback and implement. Reflect overall on Kingfisher’s craft

Updated Revision Plan:

My original goal of writing 10-11 chapters was incredibly optimistic. Through peer review and just general conversations with some peers, I’ve found that it may be better to focus on quality rather than quantity. Therefore, my new goal for revision will be to focus primarily on chapters 1-4 (maybe 5!) in order to make them the best they can be. I will continue to try and reach my original goal, but at this point, I feel that it’s better to be realistic on the amount that I can accomplish within an incredibly busy semester.

ENG216 QCQ#8

Quotation: ” ‘My dear, do let me see,’ said Lady Holmhurst, as soon as the servant had left the room. With a sign Augusta uncovered her shoulders, and her friend ran around the table to look at them. There, on her neck, was the will. The cuttle ink had proved an excellent medium, and the tattooing was as fresh as the day on which it had been done, an would, no doubt, remain so till the last hour of her life. ‘Well,’ said Lady Holmhurst, ‘I hope the young man will be duly grateful. I should have to be very much in love,’ and she looked meaningly at Augusta, ‘before I would spoil myself in that fashion for any man.’ (Haggard, chp. 14, pg. 95)

Comment: This passage and reaction from Lady Holmhurst made me think of the different forms of change regarding the view of women. On one hand, we see that Augusta has some semblance of authority and fame via her books. That causes those around her to view her highly and, even if it isn’t close to the standards we hold today, men around her have some respect for her as a woman of business. However, when we see Lady Holmhurst’s reaction, she views the tattooed will as a mark that ‘spoils’ Augusta’s worth. Rather than holding Augusta up as a multifaceted person, Holmhurst instead focuses solely on the physical value of her friend. Of course, even with the growing rights of women, their value during this time stemmed mostly from their value to men specifically, and I feel like Lady Holmhurst’s reaction is an example of how this mindset was still prevalent despite women’s autonomy.

Question: While we know that there were feminist movements, were there any women or groups of women that fought against feminist ideals? If so, did they push for women to return to more “traditional” roles?

LIL420 Project: Metacommentary

The following metacommentary is based on journals I completed during my independent study. I have added a few thoughts from my current perspective.

Based on the feedback from the last meeting with Professor Miller, there are a few things I want to revise once I make more headway into the main plot of the novella. First, I agreed that the opening might not be the best place to start the story. I love the scene. It started out as a short story start, but then grew into so much more. With a little revision, I think the scene could be condensed, especially once I figure out my intentions with it. It definitely has a place in the story, at least, it does right now. That could change, but I really think that it might be better to place it later on, maybe when the audience has a better grasp of reality. One of the pieces of advice that I was given was to “solidify the audience in reality, then bend it”. I’ve seen that Neil Gaiman does this in his novella, The Ocean at the End of the Lane, and I think that it’s a good rule to live by, especially when it comes to real-world fantasy. Another thing I’d like to revise is the scene right after Caim and Abel’s meeting with the priest. It stung, but I agree that the scene is too long and too dialogue heavy. I tried writing the next ten pages with a focus on Abel’s inner monologue as well as setting description, and even this attempt showed me just how much space the dialogue in the previous sections was taking. I like the humor in that scene, and I think my original intention was to just give some background information of the aspects of Hell, but I know that that information can fit so much better in another part of my story. The whole scene might just have to be scrapped and moved around. I felt a little discouraged about this at first, but the more I think about it, the more I’m realizing that I can never make a perfect first draft and that I’m telling the story to myself. The good stuff will come later. One last thing I’d like to revise is the dynamic between Caim and Abel. It almost feels a little inconsistent. Sometimes, they’ll act like they tolerate each other, then other times, Abel is just downright rude while Caim wants to murder him. I think having a little more grounding, not just in terms of their relationship, but in setting and time too, would be helpful in the long run.

I think some of the biggest revisions I can make with the second set of pages would be on pacing and character. When it comes to character, I need to revise some aspects of Abel’s dialogue/inner monologue just to make sure it fits, but I also need to heighten the tension between Abel and his parents. One way is to develop Abel’s competency/incompetency when it comes to working at the escape room or just being an adult in general. I should also revise the ending of the scene on page 6, just so Abel has a more immediate consequence to his actions (or rather, Caim’s actions). The clean up scene between Calliope and Abel slows the story down, so I need to make sure that the plot keeps moving. It needs to be compacted, but I’m still trying to figure out how to move the story along without sacrificing Calliope’s role within the story. I also just need to get to the library quicker, as it tends to linger on smaller, insignificant details. It seems like these pages have a good idea of where they’re going, but they just need to be refined in smaller, more detailed ways.

I think in terms of revision for the third set of pages, I need to work up the tension and the reasoning for certain scenes (like the dream sequences). There’s a lot of tension that I could use, but I tend to go through those scenes a little too quickly. There’s also a moment where Calliope, Caim, and Abel leave the library. Instead of showing the tension there, I just tell it. I think that’s the biggest point of revision within those pages. I need to work on building the tension and figure out which parts to “skim” past and which parts need to be worked up a little more. I’m somewhat happy with the pages I’ve written, but I need to really think about what points of the story I need to highlight and draw out a bit more. This isn’t so much a story revision as much as a “personal revision”, but I need to be kinder to myself when looking at the pages I’ve written and their quality. I’m just writing a draft, so it’s almost supposed to be crappy.

For the fourth set of pages, I need to focus particularly on the relationship between Abel and his parents. I also need to think about the reasoning/specifics of Abel taking over the family business. Since this is one of the main factors keeping Abel and Caim together, the relationship between Abel and his parents needs to be dismembered to cause more tension within the story. Another smaller edit would be to fix the use of italics within this section. The story is told from a first person perspective, so there’s really no need to use italics to designate Abel’s personal thoughts. One of the other biggest revisions regards Quinn. There’s a scene in which Abel blames himself for Quinn’s death, but it’s a little jarring and out of the blue. Therefore, I need to put in more moments/breadcrumbs relating to Quinn earlier on in the story, specifically about his death.

My biggest revisions for this section revolve around the relationship between Quinn and Abel. I need to establish the relationship more before plunging the reader into a huge backstory. I also need to rework some of the ‘romantic’ dialogue, as it feels/reads too scripted. One of the biggest things regards Quinn’s death. I need to clarify how long it’s been since Quinn died in order to keep Abel “stuck” in the age/mindset he was when he died. Some smaller revisions would be to dial up Abel’s grief and to plant seeds regarding Abel’s personal burdens.

LIL420 Journal #6

American society and culture is driven primarily by capitalist ideals and market-based values, which is reflected prominently within our education system. As an interdisciplinary major, I’ve had to think a lot about the value of a humanities-based education as well as how that education plays a role within my daily life. Many people believe that the humanities have no “instrumental” value within society, meaning that they offer nothing (or very little) in terms of economic gain or give people the skills they need in order to be successful in a capitalist society. Brody describes this way of thinking as “economism”, “It represents the intrusion of economic ways of thinking into areas of human existence for which such thinking is ill suited”. While the humanities can expand upon professions (such as Brody’s example of merging the humanities with medical studies in order to strengthen the teaching of ethics), I personally view the humanities as having more of an intrinsic value. This isn’t to say that I view my humanities-based education as less than say STEM-based education. For me, I pursue the humanities because the challenges and the things I learn about make me happy and allow me to look at the world and myself in different ways. I see my education as one that allows me to strive for personal growth and development, and to me that holds more value to me than then pursuing a major/profession, etc. solely for economic gain (although that is an entirely valid motivation). Clune, I feel, describes the intrinsic goal of a humanities-based education by saying, “It’s [education] to enable you to see things that were invisible, to hear new sounds, to understand what didn’t make sense”. The system of constant learning and personal growth that Clune describes is part of what makes the humanities valuable to me, regardless if it is assisting our economic system.

ENG216 QCQ#7

Quotation: “The plan may be a very good one, to prevent the prostitute being waylaid as she left the hospital by some of her old associates, but it did not seem to occur to the would-be benefactors of the girl that the arrival of a parishioner in charge of a policeman creates a great sensation in a little country community. They did not seem to have contemplated the possibility of the fact that the villagers become curious to learn what Mary Smith has been doing at —; I ventured to suggest to the authorities that the village gossips would probably over their tea hint at her gay doings, and that the young men would not long be idle in ferreting out her antecedents; and the quiet village, notwithstanding all the care of the rector or aid of his good wife, would be made very disagreeable for the fair penitent who had once quitted her home on an evil errand, and it too often happens she will quit it again, no more to return to her native place.”

Comment: This quotation highlights the views of Victorian society, especially through the lens of mostly middle and lower classes. As seen in Ruth, gossip plays a key role in how Ruth and Leonard are treated within society, despite Ruth’s best efforts to keep her past hidden. Within his piece, Acton discusses the benefits and disadvantages of the Contagious Diseases Act and the asylum-based treatment offered to fallen women. While Acton acknowledges the benefits of providing protection to returning women, he highlights one of the most prominent problems of the system. Acton and Gaskell both seem to hold the opinion that gossip and societal views shape the success of “redeeming a fallen woman”.While a fallen woman could make the choice to “return” to society, the pieces written by Acton and Gaskell show that society itself may not let them. 

Question: Regarding the Contagious Diseases Act, did works and critiques like Acton’s cause any backlash against it? Was there a push for reforming the CDA? From a modern standpoint, it’s painfully obvious that the regulations outlined in the CDA have little to no regard for women’s bodily autonomy, but I don’t think that many people within Victorian society would necessarily call for reform over that aspect alone.

LIL420 Journal #5

Most of Scarry’s work examines the idea of beauty, especially in the artistic and literary sense. The first section of the reading really stood out to me, as Scarry specifically talks about beauty within “error”. Scarry writes, “So far error has been talked about as a cognitive event that just happens to have beauty–like anything else–as one of its objects. But that description, which makes error independent of beauty, may itself be wrong. The experience of “being in error” so inevitably accompanies the perception of beauty that it begins to seem one of its abiding structural features.” (Scarry, 19). I believe that Scarry is describing the beauty of growth and revision. This is something that Jesse Miller has discussed a lot during his creative writing classes. As someone who focuses a lot on writing, I find a lot of beauty in first drafts, attempts, etc. All of the errors within these first tries are products of a mind in motion, yet when people look upon their first drafts and the magnitude of errors within them, they typically cringe and think it’s the worst thing in the world. I’ve definitely thought this way about my own work, but like Scarry says, error inevitably accompanies beauty, so I’ve been trying to rework how I think of first drafts. When I look back on my previous works, especially some of the earlier sections within my novella project, I see simple mistakes and things that I wouldn’t have done now, yet I find it almost humorous. It shows the amount of growth and the knowledge I’ve gained, and I personally think it’s a beautiful thing. In terms of Mourning Picture, I think Scarry would focus on how different perspectives bring about new layers of beauty, even if some of the perspectives are imitations.

QCQ#6

Quotation: “‘Cannot bear it! Cannot bear it!’ he repeated. ‘You must bear it madam. Do y ou suppose your child is to be exempt from the penalties of his birth? Do you suppose that he alone is to be saved from the upbraiding scoff? Do you suppose that he is ever to rank with other boys, who are not stained and marked with sin from their birth? Every creature in Eccleston may know what he is; do you think they will spare him their scorn? ‘Cannot bear it,’ indeed! Before you went into your sin, you should have thought whether you could bear the consequences or not–have had some idea how far your offspring would be degraded and scouted, till the best thing that could happen to him would be for him to be lost to all sense of shame, dead to all knowledge of guilt, for his mother’s sake” (Gaskell, Chapter 26)

Comment: I was interested in this quote because of the emphasis it places on Ruth’s son, Leonard. Throughout multiple points in the novel, Ruth has been forced to deal with her reputation as a “fallen woman”, which could really only be mitigated by Ruth becoming Mrs. Denbigh. Now, we’re seeing that the consequences of Ruth’s actions shift from Ruth herself to Leonard. Based on the quotation above, it seems that being an illegitimate child held a lot of negative connotations. Leonard is called “stained” and it’s implied in the quotation that Ruth’s “sin” can be rubbed off on other children who are close to Leonard. 

Question: I’m wondering where this belief and animosity towards illegitimate children themselves came from. Was it based on religious beliefs or was there a turning point in Victorian society in which this belief came from?

LIL420 Journal #4

Quotation 1: “This imitation is reinforced by the analogies which exist between the painter’s “language” of expression and that of the poet. We can “read” a canvas, notice metaphors, symbols, even spatial or color “rhymes” within it. Conversely we can “look at” a poem, observe its shape on the page, discuss its “imagery” and “texture.” The interrelatedness of these terms underscores their appropriateness in both poetry and painting and makes it easy to relate the two”. (Moramarco, 25)

Comment 1: This quote made me think of how we discuss written works and visual “artistic” pieces. While I understand the first viewpoints discussed in Moramarco’s text, I believe that artistic expression, whether in the written form or painted/drawn/etc, can open new insights into human thought by being compared/contrasted with one another. As Moramarco states above, poetry and painting are easily relatable through terms, once again bringing to mind our conversation of the inherent interdisciplinary aspect of the humanities. Each piece on its own can encapsulate a message and feelings, yet when combined, there’s an added layer of thoughts that one may not have considered by just looking at a single piece. I think, in a way, some people may find the idea of this combination uncomfortable, as it also makes them question their own ideas of originality.

Quotation 2: “This was our world./ I could remake each shaft of grass/ feeling its rasp on my fingers, /draw out the map of every lilac leaf /or the net of veins on my father’s /grief-tranced hand”. (Rich, 7-12)

Comment 2: I was drawn to these lines because of their “humanness”. Based on historical details of the painting, and thus the inspiration of the poem, Effie has passed away and is no longer part of the world. Despite her literal dehumanization, this section of the poem reminds the reader of her connections with the physical world. The intimate details of “each shaft of grass” and the veins on her father’s “grief-tranced hand” allow us to see parts of her world that we may not have been able to see by merely looking at the painting alone. Overall, I just think this is a beautiful section that puts the humanity back into a dead child.

Comment 3: The lines from Rich’s poem directly correlate to the ideas brought about by Moramarco. By being able to regain some of the intimate details that Elmer did not portray in his work, Rich’s imagery adds on another layer of meaning to the work, such as why we can see the father’s hands more clearly than the mother’s.

Question: While I can’t think of any off the top of my head, I’m wondering if there are any downsides to intertwining poetry and visual art. What if, in connecting a piece of prose to a painting, we misinterpret the message that either the author or the painter wanted to express? I feel like that question can stem into the realm of separating the art from the artist, which isn’t one that I have a confident answer to yet.

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