Interdisciplinary Studies Major, Writing/Marine Bio Minors

Author: Alex (Page 12 of 21)

GAP Journal #23

To Future Grantseekers:

  • Read everything. Yes, this includes the textbook. It will be your friend
  • Do your work on time. It will save you a lot of stress, especially when you have to edit everything all of the time.
  • Please actually write the journals. Sometimes the sections you write will, and I’m not exaggerating, be trash. Journals are easy points.
  • Talk to your group. Don’t be afraid to speak up and say that something isn’t working. Be open to new ideas!
  • Jesse works really hard, so give him a hand once in a while (especially with math)
  • Talk during peer reviews. It not only helps your classmates, but it helps you too.
  • Don’t be too hard on yourself. Grant writing is hard, so don’t be too upset if you don’t get it right the first time around.
  • Research Research Research
  • Have fun!

GAP Journal #22

There are a lot of themes and ideas that are emerging from the panel discussions so far. YRFCA, MEIRS, and Empowered Women have been the only groups to present so far. My group, YRFCA, talked a lot about how we worked as a team, primarily about our communication skills. I found that the other two groups spoke a lot about how well they worked together. While my group focused on how we communicated within the project, Empowered Women talked about how they communicated through similar interests. They said that they were able to bond over that shared desire to educate others about the lack of sexual education in American school systems. MEIRS talked about how they communicated through their differences, specifically in their schedule differences. The idea of communication and bonding between group members seems to be a major idea. Honestly, this makes a lot of sense, as writing grants really is a group effort. You have to be comfortable enough with a team in order to effectively write a proposal. I think the next two presentations will also have a major focus on communication. A minor theme was also difficulties that teams faced throughout the project. My team focused a lot on the budget aspect, but while other teams didn’t focus on the budget as much, they each had unique struggles. For MEIRS, they struggled with finding time to go over sections together. Empowered Women struggled with finding a way to communicate their message to the audience in a way that would make everyone comfortable with the subject material. It’s interesting to see how each team struggled, as well as how they overcame their struggles. I think that for the most part, each team essentially went through the same difficulties and were able communicate effectively.

Final CPB Reflection

Tom Standage states that, “keeping commonplace books are a form of self-definition”. My commonplace book, I think, is a thorough representation of myself and my values. The majority of my commonplace book contains a mixture of written and visual entries. Visual entries tend to take photos from popular media to describe a trend in how monsters have been portrayed throughout the years while written entries analyze the similarities and differences of works of fiction to modern counterparts. In terms of sources, I tried to stick to general images that most people could find with a google search as well as quotes from the book. This way, I feel my commonplace book entries are geared more towards a general audience rather than an scientific or literary audience. As I consider myself to be a well-rounded person, I enjoy the fact that my entries are geared more towards “common” people, as the lack of specificity allows for a wider audience to understand the material.

One entry that I believe really encapsulates my values has to be CPB#7. This entry focuses on comparing Oscar Wilde’s writing to his own speaking voice. I took a passage from chapter 10 of The Picture of Dorian Gray and compared it to a quote from Oscar Wilde during his 1895 trial regarding his homosexuality. Between the two, I found that there were multiple references to Michelangelo and Shakespeare, as well as the sentiment that “these passions were not understood by the world”. Both passages make a point that what is being discuss is really, truly love in a pure form. As a member of the LGBTQ+ community, I found that the messages in both written and verbal accounts were accurate in a modern sense. I also think that, as a writer, these comparisons bring up the classic debate of separating the art from the artist. There are very clear comparisons between the two examples, so can one separate Oscar Wilde from The Picture of Dorian Gray? This is a question that I, as a writer, need to consider as I need to bear the responsibility of being distant but not separated from my work.

Another entry that I think represents me is CPB#4. In this entry, I looked at an article that discussed a small-pox outbreak in a Catholic school for girls in Manchester during 1888. I looked at this incident through a feminist lens, as there were many feminist themes present in Jane Eyre. A quote from my analysis sums up my thoughts regarding the matter, “Women were often neglected and thought of as second-class citizens, so it doesn’t seem too far-fetched to reason that regulations and health requirements of schools for girls weren’t held to high standards. In her own way, Bronte may have included sections of Jane Eyre to push for better health care standards for women. Even though the event at St. Joseph’s school happened after the publication of Jane Eyre, it can still be reasoned that outbreaks like this and at Lowood were relatively common. Regarding Jane Eyre‘s feminist theme, I think health-care for women is also an important aspect of the novel that doesn’t seem to be touched upon often while analyzing this work”. As a woman and feminist, I am deeply concerned about how our world progresses in terms of equal rights. Learning about this history, in my opinion, is as important as advocating for change. If we don’t understand the past, then we can’t understand the future and how our policies effect the world around us.

CPB#4 also looks at craft elements that Charlotte Bronte may have employed while writing Jane Eyre. Craft and writing techniques are something that I looked at extensively within my QCQ’s. However, I tried to separate my QCQ’s and my CPB’s in order to get a better sense of the Victorian culture/mindset while looking at each novel. I think out of all my entries, I enjoyed discussing CPB#5 the most. This entry was simply a video of David Hasselhoff singing “Confrontation” for the Jekyll and Hyde musical. Of this, I said, “I think it speaks to how the themes of duality and inner monstrosity are adaptable into many artistic forms. This piece also shows how timeless the story of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde is, from the duality of nature to the true definition of what is good and what is evil”. Reflecting on this entry, I also think that making “monster” stories into musicals is a great example of how adaptable these stories are into our modern culture. We have musical adaptations, movies, TV shows, and there was even a manga adaptation of Jane Eyre. This entry made me look into just how many forms monster stories can take, and the short answer is this: Monster stories are everywhere in our lives because they are so malleable to contexts outside of their written ones. Overall, I enjoyed creating my Commonplace book entries as well as writing my QCQ’s as I feel I got to explore topics that were important to me and apply them in a different historical and cultural setting.

Commonplace Book Peer Reflections

I looked at the commonplace books of Lizzy and Dylan.

Lizzy:

I’ve noticed that your commonplace book entries that necessarily have a theme that can be grasped. If anything, your entries border on an artistic sense, however, you also focus on people within your quotes and explanations. These people, more often than not, are representations of marginalized groups. In your entries, I think you make the issues shown in each of the books we’ve read into a physical, artistic representation that summarizes what the authors were intending. In this entry in particular, you take the sexual taboos and desires and connect a heterosexual example (Dracula) to a homosexual example (Carmilla), effectively stating that these issues are universal.

Dylan:

*I was unable to leave a comment on your page* Your commonplace entries seem to focus on the “modernity” of the monsters we’ve discussed as well as their non-monstrous counterparts. An example that comes to mind is your photo of Rainbow Stag Beetle in which you discuss how works like The Beetle make organisms like this one into “monsters” that people come to fear. The exploitation of animals in these works, like bats/dogs in Dracula, and beetles in The Beetle have far reaching effects in terms of conserving species. To me, it seems like your entries really encompass your values and your sympathy towards creatures that have been “monster-fied”.

Commonplace Book Reflection Notes

Looking back on my commonplace book entries throughout the semester, I’ve been able to take some main points.

  • Regarding the overall themes of my entries, I found that I don’t have a set theme that extends throughout all of my entries. I tend to have a theme for each separate book, such as feminist themes in Jane Eyre or sexuality in Dorian Gray.
  • I think my favorite entries to write did regard themes of sexuality and feminism, but I also think that a lot of my entries were separated from my QCQ’s.
  • My QCQ’s focused a lot on craft techniques whereas my commonplace journals focused on how ideas such as feminism were viewed in the Victorian era.
  • As for my final reflection essay, I think I’ll focus on the second option regarding how my commonplace entries reflect me and my values.

“Dead Man Walking”-Matthew Demers

This is the story of an old prizefighter who has a deadly encounter with a young city-slicker. This was such a fun story to read, and you managed to convey so much in such a short page count. Like Luke said, this story fits incredibly well into the short story form. There’s a lot I like about this. The dialogue between all the characters is so unique and distinct, I really love how it shows off their personalities. Even a side-character such as Maccready is fully fleshed out. This story left me with so many questions (in a good way) about the Reaper and his motivations. I would love to see this as a novel or serial series, but I’d hate for the charm of your short story to be taken away by lengthening it. In the way of suggestions, I have to say that I don’t really have anything. This is a clean work, but maybe you could describe the surrounding environment a little more? Add some details about the bar or even the murder site. I do have some questions about the Reaper. If he knew that the kid wasn’t a big threat, why did he have to kill him? If he wants to be left alone, why did he feel the need to kill a member of a very powerful family that had international ties? I also wish we got a sense of how your main character became the Reaper. Maybe you could discuss this in a scene where the Reaper reveals himself to Koning? Overall, this is such a great story and you did a wonderful job!

“Remember Me”-Marissa Fedor

This is the story of a girl who is completely forgotten by everyone in her life. As we’ve seen in both your last story and this one, you have a talent for keeping tension and unease throughout your narratives. Overall, the pacing was nice, though there were some spots that felt a bit slow. It was also a great detail to add the lake from the beginning to the end. It acts as a catalyst for the events of being forgotten. I also liked your decision to write this story in a first-person point of view. I think it really adds to the uneasiness and tension of your character. Just a few questions/suggestions: The scene with the police officer needs some reworking. Even if they do dismiss her at the end, I don’t think the officer would immediately assume that she’s a prankster. Even if the officer were certain that there wasn’t anyone with her name, wouldn’t the police want to keep her for more questions or even to see if she needed medical attention? I think if you lean more into the ideal that most people genuinely want to help, it may lead your story in a more interesting direction. I was also a little confused about the ending and Liam. What is Liam’s motive in the story? Does he know that he met Mia in the coma? Did he somehow have the ability to wipe everyone’s memory? In a way, Liam comes across as an antagonist in this, though I don’t think that’s your intention. I would suggest considering what role you want Liam to play and how his dynamic contrasts or compares to Mia’s motive. Overall, I really loved your narrative and I think you have a lot of room to work with without losing the core part of your story!

CPB#11

From the National Geographic article “Six Ways to Stop a Vampire”

The traditional belief that garlic’s odor deters vampires may have originated with the disease rabies. “In 1998,” writes Mark, “Spanish neurologist Dr. Juan Gomez-Alonso made a correlation between reports of rabies outbreaks in and around the Balkans—especially a devastating one in dogs, wolves, and other animals that plagued Hungary from 1721 to 1728—and the ‘vampire epidemics’ that erupted shortly thereafter. Wolves and bats, if rabid, have the same snarling, slobbering look about them that folklore ascribed to vampires—as would a human being suffering from rabies. Various other symptoms support the rabies-vampire link: Dr. Gomez-Alonso found that nearly 25 percent of rabid men have a tendency to bite other people. That almost guarantees transmission, as the virus is carried in saliva. Rabies can even help explain the supposed aversion of vampires to garlic. Infected people display a hypersensitive response to any pronounced olfactory stimulation, which would naturally include the pungent smell of garlic.”

“Twinkie Boy”-Andrew Albano

There is no possible way to truly encapsulate everything that “Twinkie Boy” is. It is a story of survival, of hope lost, and of hope found. Beyond all that, this is a story that is just downright strange in all the best ways. I think we’ve all tried hard to really stick to more hardcore and serious topics while writing our stories, so reading “Twinkie Boy” was really refreshing because you just throw seriousness to the wind and go for it. This was a fun world to be thrown into and turning Hostess into a “cryptid”-like thing post-apocalypse was definitely the right move. I never really felt bogged down by the realism of the situation. Of course the main character couldn’t possibly survive on twinkies alone, but in YOUR story, he does. I think people forget that while yes, some fiction does benefit from realism, not all stories have to follow the rules. Your story is a great example of what happens when you break realism and essentially say “Fuck it”. I loved the story and the plot was definitely one that I wanted to see through. If anything, I was more confused by Mr. Smith’s name change. Why the name Hussein? It just seems very random. The only reasoning I can see is with the meaning of the name, which is “good, small handsome one”, which can be used in an ironic sense as Hussein is a goblin-esq. creature. I also wish the reader could’ve gotten a glimpse into the adventures of your main character and Hussein. I could really see it go towards a “Don Quixote” direction. Overall, great job!

“Surviving the Day”-Riley Patenaude

This is the story of a woman caught in the middle of a robbery and a man willing to do whatever it takes for his daughter. I really enjoyed this story, especially your characterization. Claire’s motives never feel unrealistic. She’s a woman who seems to have really prepared herself mentally for a date, only for her planning to go to waste. I feel like most people would say that focusing on a ‘little’ thing like that during a robbery is unrealistic, but I’d disagree. I think, especially in a jarring situation like that, someone would really think about how their day is going to shit. Along with characters, I really enjoyed Sean’s character. At first, he has this hard/crime-boss persona, but once his plot develops, he is actually very family motivated and calm. I did like the dual stories of Claire and Sean, but (moving into the realm of critiques) I wonder how their stories really intertwine. Your characters inhabit the same space but don’t interact or have any similar motivations. Because of this, I was personally more attached to Sean’s story than Claire. I think the core of your story lies in Sean’s desperation and the struggle of him coming to terms that he’s done something wrong. The scene between Sean and the cop was really well written and I would’ve liked to see more of it. Maybe you can intertwine Claire and Sean’s stories by having Claire be a bigger part of the robbery-maybe as a hostage held at gun-point. The dynamic between smaller problems like dating versus a larger problem like saving a dying daughter would be really interesting to explore. Other than that, I liked your story and think you did a wonderful job!

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