My second story, Six Bullets, was reviewed on 12/1. Initially, I was pretty nervous about this story. I wanted to challenge myself and write an action sequence that didn’t lose momentum throughout the narrative. I also wanted the fight scene to not be the “main” story. Based on the feedback I received, I think I might’ve tried to pack too much into the story. A lot of the feedback was about character motivation, such as why Reyes was checking for the ring during a shootout, and other concerns about technical things, like Reyes not having extra ammo. I think for my revisions in the future, I need to focus on revising the technicalities of this story. There were a lot of things that took out the readers, most of which could’ve been avoided if I had written the story carefully. One of the biggest notes was that I either need to heighten the tension and story surrounding the shootout or I need to heighten the tension/story surrounding Reyes and Penny. Personally, I might lean towards the latter, though I’m not quite sure. If anything, I might take out some of the exposition portions. This review session was a little harder than the last one, mostly because I was happy with a lot of the things that I had written. I want to try and revise this story, but I also feel like it doesn’t quite fit the form of a short story. Regardless, this peer review was helpful, especially since I need to work on clarity and technicalities within my stories.
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