This is the story of an old prizefighter who has a deadly encounter with a young city-slicker. This was such a fun story to read, and you managed to convey so much in such a short page count. Like Luke said, this story fits incredibly well into the short story form. There’s a lot I like about this. The dialogue between all the characters is so unique and distinct, I really love how it shows off their personalities. Even a side-character such as Maccready is fully fleshed out. This story left me with so many questions (in a good way) about the Reaper and his motivations. I would love to see this as a novel or serial series, but I’d hate for the charm of your short story to be taken away by lengthening it. In the way of suggestions, I have to say that I don’t really have anything. This is a clean work, but maybe you could describe the surrounding environment a little more? Add some details about the bar or even the murder site. I do have some questions about the Reaper. If he knew that the kid wasn’t a big threat, why did he have to kill him? If he wants to be left alone, why did he feel the need to kill a member of a very powerful family that had international ties? I also wish we got a sense of how your main character became the Reaper. Maybe you could discuss this in a scene where the Reaper reveals himself to Koning? Overall, this is such a great story and you did a wonderful job!